From a7e4747f499d4219c29277e80e64e4fdf604628a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Scott Rifenbark <scott.m.rifenbark@intel.com>
Date: Thu, 11 Aug 2011 13:55:07 -0700
Subject: documentation/dev-manual: Scott Garman's review comments.

Made several editing corrections for various terms and phrasings based on
Scott Garman's review.

(From yocto-docs rev: a21ba80151ce82683d45cd67ddb0728d779b007a)

Signed-off-by: Scott Rifenbark <scott.m.rifenbark@intel.com>
Signed-off-by: Richard Purdie <richard.purdie@linuxfoundation.org>
---
 documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml | 11 ++++++-----
 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-)

(limited to 'documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml')

diff --git a/documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml b/documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml
index 5189df5e5b..eb57a9d8db 100644
--- a/documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml
+++ b/documentation/dev-manual/dev-manual-intro.xml
@@ -24,7 +24,7 @@
 
     <para>
         Welcome to the Yocto Project Development Guide!  
-        This guide provides an over-arching view of the development process within the Yocto Project.  
+        This guide provides a general view of the development process using the Yocto Project.  
         This guide is just that – a guide.  
         It helps you understand the bigger picture involving development using the Yocto Project.  
     </para>
@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@
     <para>
         The following list describes what you can get from this guide:
         <itemizedlist>
-            <listitem><para>A general idea of and references to information that lets you get set 
+            <listitem><para>Information that lets you get set 
                 up to develop using the Yocto Project.</para></listitem>
             <listitem><para>Information to help developers that are new to the open source environment 
                 and to the distributed revision control system Git, which the Yocto Project 
@@ -53,6 +53,7 @@
                 concepts.</para></listitem>
             <listitem><para>Information that will help you migrate an existing project to the 
                 Yocto Project development environment.</para></listitem>
+            <listitem><para>Many references to other sources of related information.</para></listitem>
         </itemizedlist>
     </para>
 </section>
@@ -63,7 +64,7 @@
     <para>
         This manual will not give you the following:
         <itemizedlist>
-            <listitem><para>Step-by-step instructions when these instructions exist in other Yocto 
+            <listitem><para>Step-by-step instructions if those instructions exist in other Yocto 
                 Project documentation.  
                 For example, The Application Development Toolkit (ADT) User’s Guide contains detailed 
                 instruction on how to obtain and configure the Eclipse Yocto Plug-in.</para></listitem>
@@ -71,8 +72,8 @@
                 This type of material resides in an appropriate reference manual.  
                 For example, system variables are documented in the Poky Reference Manual.</para></listitem>
             <listitem><para>Detailed public information that is not specific to the Yocto Project.  
-                For example, exhaustive information on how to use Git is better covered in the public 
-                domain than in this manual.</para></listitem>
+                For example, exhaustive information on how to use Git is covered better through the 
+                Internet than in this manual.</para></listitem>
         </itemizedlist>
     </para>
 </section>
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